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What a what!

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what a vibrant black evening!
what a wind!
what a tree!
what a clouds in what a sky!
what a colours orange yellow and blue
all turning grey
what a grey sky it will be soon!
what a white lightning!
what a kid getting blown away by the wind!
what a smell of fresh rain
gone before night
you are slow, what a slow you are!
almost disappearing
I am too, not as much as you
but I am too
again, what a wind!
what a sky without colours!
what a mute thunderstorm!
again, what a rain
and it is falling
what a murmuring of boring women!
what a boring play of blabbering kids!
what a boring crow
flying back to its tree!
what a useless me
watching and hearing all this!

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14 responses to “What a what!”

  1. thebibliophilewriter Avatar
    thebibliophilewriter

    What a word play!!!👌👌👌👌

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    1. Tomic Riter Avatar
      Tomic Riter

      Thanks, mate!! Appreciate your feedback 🙌❤️❤️

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  2. grumpygorman Avatar
    grumpygorman

    Wow, rich and complex mind you’ve got there. Take good care of it. 😉

    Shared this poem here…

    https://grumpysgiftspoetry.org/2020/05/16/what-a-what-tomic-riter/

    Hope you’re ok with it. 😉

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    1. Tomic Riter Avatar
      Tomic Riter

      Oh I am honoured again! 🙌🙌💙 Thank you so much!

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      1. grumpygorman Avatar
        grumpygorman

        Take ‘er easy!

  3. Lia Avatar
    Lia

    Hmph! Said rueful-sudden-
    smilingly, by girl-next-door.
    What lit… what a boy!
    What joy! What not!
    What not a bore.

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    1. Tomic Riter Avatar
      Tomic Riter

      Love the wordplay here! ❤️❤️

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      1. Lia Avatar
        Lia

        😏🙏😄❤️

      2. Lia Avatar
        Lia

        p.s. I truly thought your poem wonderful and amazing. Very good literature.

      3. Tomic Riter Avatar
        Tomic Riter

        This being recognised as literature is a huge thing for me 🙌🙌🙌

      4. Lia Avatar
        Lia

        I have been reading quite a bit of venerated lit lately (offline, albeit skipping around in various books according to my usual ADD reading style 😁), so I do recognize it. :)) 🙌🙌💛

      5. Tomic Riter Avatar
        Tomic Riter

        🙌💙💙

  4. Tom Avatar
    Tom

    I love this one! I don’t know quite why but I relished this line in particular: “what a clouds in what a sky!”

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    1. Tomic Riter Avatar
      Tomic Riter

      So glad to know 🙌🙌🙌 I write mostly in a breath haha. Really appreciate your reading it and sharing your thoughts 💙💙

      Reply

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